tlc3s
Aesthetics: 7
Gameplay: 8
Technical: 8.5
Total: 23.5 (As you said, this map just needs a bit more time to develop, good effort).
corruob3
Aesthetics: 9
Gameplay: 8
Technical: 7.5
Total: 24.5 (A few little things that should be added, pretty good map)
randr_a1
Aesthetics: 7.5
Gameplay: 8.5
Technical: 8
Total: 24 (Expect nothing less from V/DT in this time)
rockyroad
Aesthetics: 6
Gameplay: 6
Technical: 6
Total: 18(Considering you're fairly new to mapping, it's a very good effort. Just keep trying, don't listen to people saying excrement)