I uploaded the map to the beta server, but I'm going to hold off on the textures since I don't want them cluttering the root texture directory on the server. I also put together a demo pointing out some of the things that could use revising. Then I had to cut it short to purge myself of fecal matter, but a lot of people have already pointed out some of the other issues. I'd follow the guidelines outlined here and put out another beta:
http://dplogin.com/forums/index.php?topic=5149.0Also, the "dm" seems a bit superfluous. Why not just call it tlc2
(_beta3).bsp?