Posting here doesn't make you a better mapper. Nobody is going to critique every stage of every map you do to help you improve. Nobody has done it that way. And don't put it on forums as: Newmap: name -- put like: Looking for help on a map -- etc.etc..
Look at guides like everyone else. You've released a map before that was awful, that's why I posted that. I'm all for new mappers, but the lack of quality being produced is pitiful. When maps get released and have the same quality as Dhemap, then the game certainly isn't improving.
It may come across as mean, but isn't the ultimate goal of mapping to make a map that people PLAY? If that's what you want, it should take almost a month to finish a map, and that's after months of scrapping previous maps. Message people on IRC/forums to get help with mapping to become better, learn what textures will actually look nice together etc... Go look at good mappers maps, try to copy them, look at guides (ie Cusoman's youtube video on terrain) - practice it. Copy other maps. It takes time to make a good map, that's why there's barely any good mappers out there. Chef-killer shouldn't waste his time going over this, because comparing this to any DP map out there you should realize it's awful.
Copying other maps was the easiest way for me to learn mapping. I could see what parts I'm doing wrong and work on adjusting them. I also had some help from Cusoman and Termi, I'm sure you could find somebody to help you. But don't release any maps until you've done like 10+ completed maps. It's the best way.
TL;DR - Get help on mapping.