Beat it in about 45 seconds. Not to say that's a bad thing. But I could also replicate it about the same amount of time in bsp. Just do better before even thinking of posting a map here. It's just sloppy and generic jumping. Nothing new, innovative, or anything even close to that.
Just take some time with these maps.
Nice looking maps series to take a look at: alt, neox, hellfire, apocalypse
Here's an example from the alt series, simple little thing, but makes it so much more memorable to want to play.